Author: Norma McDonald
Illustrator: Norma McDonald
Publisher:
Magabala books
Year
of publications: 2013
http://www.magabala.com/
Overview
Readership. Middle grade
Main
character: Cheeky, a mouse
Illustrations are by the author in a loose whimsical style which
captures the anthropomorphic emotions and antics of the mouse in a delightful way.
What
happens/changes? The mouse learns to curb unsafe behaviour.
What drives the
story? The danger to the main character and
information about the habits of the Hopping Mouse.
Are the conflicts resolved? Yes
Does
it flow when read aloud? : Moderately well
Spinifex Mouse is the tale of Cheeky, a spinifex
hopping mouse, who lives in the Pilbara region of Western Australia. Cheeky is
named because he is loud and adventurous and cheeky. He is proud of his jumping
ability and shows off, which puts him in
danger. Cheeky ignores the safety of the
family den and sneaks out to find more spinifex seeds to eat.
This story introduces the reader to some of the
interesting aspects of the Spinifex Hopping Mouse in a simple manner which may
appeal to children interested in animals and nature. It flows well as part of the story and not as separate information. Further information is contained in a glossary at the end.
I chose this book for the illustrations.
Element of Picture Book construction: Beginnings and endings.
This book shows how important it is to start the story at the right place. This story opens with a secondary character and takes four pages to introduce the main character. A little rearranging could well have made the beginning crackle.
Would
I recommend this
book?
use as a door stop | Library borrowing once or twice | Repeat borrowing | contemplate ownership | definite purchase for the collection |
Today is a busy day. Daughter darling has been walking around saying "Happy Singles Awareness Day". For those who follow Valentines mania and rush out for flowers, chocolate and making promises you don't intend to keep, Happy Valentines Cupid stupid day and saints and stuff.
I have had a lot of trouble learning the water colours and am very happy that people share their skills online so i can learn from them. I over wet the paper and bled colours so they went fuzzy or changed, I under wet and it did nothing, I wash too much, with the wrong size brush, I use the wrong brushes, one brush sheds into the paint leaving bits of course hair, I rubbed the wet paper into balls and tore the page, I forgot to secure the paper so it folded and buckled, I didn't wash the brush out properly and my colours turned to sludge, I dripped, I spilt, I fell asleep with art gear in my bed, I overturned the glass and guess what... I AM LOVING WATER COLOUR WEEK.
I returned all my library books and borrowed another heavy reading schedule. Heavy because they are all hard covers. I shall take a bag next time.
I had my wound redressed and the stitches come out on Monday. I am going to have a magnificent pirate scar so need to practice my pirate speaking. Pirate as in Dread Pirate Roberts, or Penzance or Cap'n Jack Sparro', not pirate as in deadly cut throat thieving violent evil stinking insurance doubling raiders. I have a hat too! One of my favourite picture books is called "The Man whose mother was a pirate." I think I may have to invest in some very bright red stripy trousers.
I also wrote a short piece for
http://writetodone.com/scene-stealers-fun-puns/
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You must use the
exact wording we provide—in this case, it must appear in the beginning of your
story.
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350 words or less.
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My contribution for Scene Stealer #9 (prompt wording in bold)
They
say love is blind. Right now blindness is a power out. I
stumble over something cold and wet. The door frame bruises my shoulder. Cold
and wet is not good, especially something with a pungent aroma reminiscent of a
sewer drain. Love might be blind but it doesn’t lack olfactory senses. My hand
pats the wall in the approximate location of a switch. Flicking elicits no response.
I feel my way along the passage to the laundry door, jarring my hip on the book
shelf and belting my knee against some wheeled contraption left leaning in the way.
Love is blind but it sure doesn’t block
pain sensors. I poke around for the
torch and discover the empty recharge socket. A constant rumble of obscenities
slips out from under my breath hidden under the rumbling thunder. Love is not
deaf. My foot reinforces this as an ear splitting squeal from a small fur thing
adds counterpoint to my increased swearing. Love? The skittering of tiny claws
is muffled by the dirty laundry collapsing on it. Blind maybe, angry
definitely. Stepping through the kitchen door I abruptly measure my length on
the floor. Something metallic rolls away into the depths of the darkness and my joints scream protest. I grope in the bottom
drawer for the waxy texture of a candle. Fingers explore and ears listen for
the soft rattle of wood slivers in cardboard. A golden glow pushes back the shadows and
spills a soft luminescence on sleeping faces. A tuck of a blanket, a kiss on
soft skin, an emotional upwelling tugging a smile and dissolving the anger, the
candlelight illuminates. A sleepy murmur of love obliterates the obstacles from
focus. Love is not blind it is blinding.
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Participants in my PB 14:14 challenge, all the way from Australia!!! Who would've guessed? It's interesting how you used a book to show how NOT to do something. Yes, make sure you introduce the main character on the first page! Not a secondary character, and then the MC 4 pages later. Did the book at least redeem itself by having a great ending? Thanks for sharing and for the reminder that ALL books can still teach us a thing or two about writing.
ReplyDeleteA touch of reality, this story evokes many memories of when my children were young, thanks for the nice surprise.
ReplyDeleteLove your writing prompt. Watercolors are difficult to say the least. Great job.
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